Just some minor bits of critiquing drawings, I've noticed you seem to have a habit of giving ponies very thick necks. This is especially noticeable on both Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash. Also, I think your Fluttershy model might be based a bit too much on adult Fluttershy, she is extremely lanky every time I've seen her as a filly. Other than that I'm enjoying your story and drawing style, gj.